I wrote this when I was 11, so it's not up to date.

The River of Memories

Two children, a boy and a girl, splash together
In a river between their houses.
So young, and naive
They grow older and see their differences.
Their parents call them back into their homes
And they leave the River of Memories.
After dinner they return to the River.
Just to look and remember,
Their fun and joyful memories.

I was only 11, so cut my some slack in that respect, but I'm trying to make every bit of writing I've done better, so please give helpful criticism

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I would try redrafting this with a meter, and considering hard about where your full-stops and line-breakers are, as they influence the ease of the read and the importance of subjects.

One thing I noticed was how similar the sentence structure was for all of the lines.

"Splashing together, a boy and a girl,
In a river between their houses.
So young... So naive...
Yet as they grow older, stronger and wise,
The differences ignored become unobscure.
Called back to their hearth, beckoned to come home,
They leave the River of Memories.
After dinner they return to the River.
Just to watch and remember,
Their fun and joyful memories."

Having a constant tight range of syllables (9-11, spare the third line which makes up for it with pauses) helps the reader progress though your poem without having to re-read a line or get thrown off. I didn't write it in meter, although it's close enough for the reader to anticipate the tone.

What I like about your poems so far is the content, although I think that your skills at open prose and poetry can go up a few notches. Did you ever take any classes or courses on poetry at all?