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 Post subject: Boredom with a friend= Start/finish each others story.
PostPosted: October 11th, 2009, 9:02 am 
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me and my friend was on msn just now, and both talking about our english lessons years ago. and how much we failed at it ^_^;

so we decided to write the beginnings of storys... only 2 paragraphs.
As most people who do story, know the start as to draw the reader in, and take them out of thier world... kinda thing... so what do you guys think... you may know how the better at english out of me and my friend...

bold= what i wrote:
story one wrote:
Under the flickering lights on the corner of a run-down street, stood the black silhouette of a man, the light struck the gun. Load shudder echoed throughout the city as the gun was fired, the feeling of hot coals ripped through a man’s chest as the bullet tore through him, it was then we realised that this wasn’t a mistake. This was the callus act of murder. He was thrown from the street into the local canal where his body would lay rest until one unexpected passer-by sees the hand floating motionless in the dim murky waters.

A sepia door, draped in half twisted blinds and tangled cord lay the name P.I Tracey Mane. Light danced in a flicker as she lit another cigarette with the mixed thick aroma of coffee. Her life was as dull as her desk lamp and as empty as her patiently filed drawer. The dust had settled. Her mind alike, with the wild running thoughts of the night prior to his death. With little sleep this spelled her out, black and white newspaper printed. She was never a cover story nor was she in that type of business. Corruption and solitude was the life of the average hand me down copper. She wasn’t cut out, not as plain as the paper in her cabinet but as sharp as the knife she held for protection. Always close at hand.


story two wrote:
The tension was visible like a thick fog that lay around shrouded trees in a dense forest. The chill of the cold metal on my hand as I grasped the door handle, I stood in the doorway. Between them and the world behind me, I stood waiting in strong pause.

Their faces dropped like the eerie atmosphere of an impending storm, their words spoke meaningless dribble like that of a convict villains, as they slowly stood up the floor shrieked like tense rusty springs of an old car on a bitter frosty morning. They knew that what befell of them. was going to be much worse than that of which stood in the door.



story three wrote:
As the wind passes by the field of red and yellow flowers, mixing together like burst of fiery flames from the remains of a bush fire stood a girl in a clean white dress with long flowing hairs. As she walked her hands slowly stroke over the flowers with the delicacy of a butterflies wing. In the distance laid the ruins of a once monumental building that overlooked these fields.

A fast track blur. Her mind was an enviable blank page in the start of a book, the writer block. She started, dazed but delicate. Her bare feet brushed the dead earth where life once bloomed like the memories of her past like scattered ash to the wind. She was as forgotten as the ruins, abandoned inhabitations of her people. She was left behind.

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 Post subject: Re: Boredom with a friend= Start/finish each others story.
PostPosted: October 15th, 2009, 3:52 am 
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As the wind passes by the field of red and yellow flowers, mixing together like burst of fiery flames from the remains of a bush fire stood a girl in a clean white dress with long flowing hairs. As she walked her hands slowly stroke over the flowers with the delicacy of a butterflies wing. In the distance laid the ruins of a once monumental building that overlooked these fields.

A fast track blur. Her mind was an enviable blank page in the start of a book, the writer block. She started, dazed but delicate. Her bare feet brushed the dead earth where life once bloomed like the memories of her past like scattered ash to the wind. She was as forgotten as the ruins, abandoned inhabitations of her people. She was left behind.


The boy awoke from the dream. It was the same recurring dream he had had since he was little. He asked his mom about it once, but the look on her face was that of denial; she brushed it off, but he knew she had had the dream too. Everyone had. No one talked about it, and life continued as the tower on the black hillside continued to crumble over their cotages and farms.

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 Post subject: Re: Boredom with a friend= Start/finish each others story.
PostPosted: October 15th, 2009, 11:33 am 
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Hey devil, I was confused...

Was what you posted just something to be taken at face value or are we supposed to play the game? Cuz if we're supposed to play the game, I'll start posting.

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 Post subject: Re: Boredom with a friend= Start/finish each others story.
PostPosted: October 18th, 2009, 3:21 am 
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yeh. awesome idea :3

loved frankcoat's :)

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 Post subject: Re: Boredom with a friend= Start/finish each others story.
PostPosted: October 19th, 2009, 11:18 pm 
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I think having a "continue this story thing" is a good idea, but I thought that's what the point of this post was. Could you rename the post so more people get involved?

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